The War Road is mentioned several times. It seems to be key to the setting. It's not shown. There are many small towns scattered along the coast. Not shown. To the east there is the great Luasa Desert. On the map, it's the Luasa Sands. This is pg2. Is a bit of clarity too much to ask? /End
Ok. Now languages are annoying me. Firstly, don't tell me about languages on page 4. I don't care. It's too soon. If you do, it should build on what you've already told me. Hannic, Hasher, Hulathi, Alwainic, Mouathenic. No idea what any of these things are yet. Poor structure.
"when you're first delving in you might occasionally find yourself lost in its terms" No shit Sherlock. Good there's a glossary. But explain words in context and make the glossary a nice to have rather than a necessity.