one way to grasp the poor construction of these paragraphs is to read them aloud. you will stumble over the words and struggle to maintain the thought.
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i want to do the thing where i rewrite this so that it sounds like english but i don’t even know what he is trying to say
jul 9, 2025, 3:30 am • 1,158 11 • view
I think the best thing to do with this is to toss it with a vinaigrette and add some crumbled feta and a few croutons.
jul 9, 2025, 3:40 am • 1 0 • view
Pretty sure this is ai
jul 9, 2025, 3:38 am • 1 0 • view
Non-AI technogibberish is a lost art.
jul 9, 2025, 3:37 am • 0 0 • view
I think he’s trying to blame Trump on The Excesses of Wokeness(TM). A theme that certainly hasn’t been touched on in the pages of the Times for at least…oh, the last 14 hours or so.
jul 9, 2025, 3:45 am • 2 0 • view
It’s bad. Maybe he used AI - trying it out?
jul 9, 2025, 4:11 pm • 0 0 • view
I walked away with two words: Obfuscated and Incoherently. They apply to the text reasonably well, so it is fitting that it contains them.
jul 9, 2025, 3:38 am • 1 0 • view
I think he's trying to say he's the smartest person in the room, but it's an unconvincing argument.
jul 9, 2025, 3:33 am • 1 0 • view
Good to see I am not the only one who has no clue what he is trying to say.
jul 9, 2025, 3:34 am • 1 0 • view
Just don't forget to capitalize the word English, Jamelle, or you'll break my heart.
jul 9, 2025, 4:33 am • 1 0 • view
It's a lot like the way that I write, but that's why I have an engineering degree.
jul 9, 2025, 3:37 am • 0 0 • view
Grok, write me like one of your French girls, but use a lot of words
jul 9, 2025, 3:37 am • 0 0 • view
We must fall back on the ol de rigueur' "topic sentence" which really needs to be somewhere in the (nonfiction) paragraph. When I was in college we would watch Eric Severeid's reports and try to find the topic sentence. Maybe the author is writing fiction.
jul 9, 2025, 4:20 pm • 0 0 • view
After about your 8th legal memo to Partner or brief to the Court, you get this down: 4 maxims of coherent discourse 1.Quality: be truthful and have evidence of what you say 2.Quantity: be succinct and yet complete 3.Relevant: be relevant to the topic as presented 4.Manner: be clear and orderly
jul 9, 2025, 5:25 pm • 0 0 • view
you should never say a nice word about ai on this platform because it is not a good use of your capital but as it happens claude is up to this one ai is amazing at sifting through trash
jul 9, 2025, 3:43 am • 4 0 • view
"Biden openly embraced identity politics focused on antiracism. This replaced the more unifying message of early Obama-era politics. Instead of bringing clarity, this approach created more confusion in our complex society.
jul 9, 2025, 3:44 am • 3 0 • view
Trump has exploited the failures of identity-focused politics. He has won over some disaffected Black and Latino voters while appealing to white Americans. Trump has flipped the script by portraying whites as victims and minorities as oppressors who receive unfair advantages."
jul 9, 2025, 3:44 am • 3 0 • view
it is of course being stated obliquely because if stated directly someone might disagree with it
jul 9, 2025, 3:44 am • 6 0 • view
I guess the tacit assumption of our politics replaced the unifying ethos of the early Obama years and became a very bad conventional wisdom that obfuscated more than it illuminated. What was that tacit assumption? "antiracism." I feel like we need an abstract noun or three more.
jul 9, 2025, 4:34 am • 4 0 • view
I re-read it a few times and then re-read what you said above. There a ton of words you can avoid avoid and you need to watch the bouncing ball. I agree with your reading. I think there is a question being begged up front, though.
jul 9, 2025, 8:19 pm • 2 0 • view
Probably multiple questions driven to panhandling.
jul 9, 2025, 8:21 pm • 3 0 • view
1. I don't understand antiracism so it must be inherently confusing. 2. Why do these kids today persist in believing identities affect how they're treated and want to do something about it, when they just need to believe we're all the same and other people will accept that? But that's just a guess.
jul 9, 2025, 4:36 am • 0 0 • view
I imagine the sheer cognitive effort of untangling Tommy Chit-Chat's prose might trigger a brain aneurysm; please be good to yourself. If you haven't got your health, you haven't got anything.
jul 9, 2025, 3:33 am • 0 0 • view
Allow me to translate: “Kids these days, amirite?”
jul 9, 2025, 11:38 pm • 1 0 • view
This is actually something LLMs are (IMO) good at. I asked ChatGPT to dial down the pretentiousness by 50%:
jul 9, 2025, 4:32 am • 0 0 • view
Long as you're getting your hands dirty, how about asking LolNazi Grok to do that? It might be more dialed in on what's going on there.
jul 9, 2025, 11:29 am • 1 0 • view
Isn't it easier to just write the damned thing?
jul 9, 2025, 11:44 am • 0 0 • view
I’ll try! Biden failed to make Obama’s utopian campaign vision of an America that’s equal to all a reality in 4 years. Trump capitalized on this during his campaign, so he was elected by the people Trump is trying to disadvantage further to create a white Christian ethnostate.
jul 9, 2025, 3:48 am • 0 0 • view
i do not agree with this but i think it’s what he’s saying in what could definitely be done better in normal english
jul 9, 2025, 3:48 am • 0 0 • view
Genuinely think he gets told "professor, I have no idea what you're talking about" all the time and he just adds the "I was 4 in 2008" part in his head.
jul 9, 2025, 3:34 am • 55 0 • view
My daughter says it sounds like a wannabe philosopher used AI like the students in her class
jul 9, 2025, 3:39 am • 1 0 • view
“We went woke, so, sadly we must go broke”
jul 9, 2025, 3:35 am • 2 0 • view
I read one paragraph of that piece to my wife, the English major, and she was like, “Yeah, I have no idea what’s going on here. It’s just word salad.”
jul 9, 2025, 4:05 am • 0 0 • view
😆
jul 9, 2025, 10:52 am • 0 0 • view
I'll give it a shot. "Obama divided us into interest groups. Trump 2.0 capitalized on the people who preferred the vision of a unified United States, peeling off minority voters who preferred not to identify themselves as minority voters." That's the core idea buried in the tortured prose.
jul 9, 2025, 3:49 am • 2 0 • view
I wrote Obama, but I meant Biden.
jul 9, 2025, 3:50 am • 0 0 • view
i haven’t seen this much rhetoric obscuring the total lack of content since undergrad. wow.
jul 9, 2025, 3:32 am • 8 0 • view
jul 9, 2025, 4:26 am • 1 0 • view
Some awesome postmodern wordplay going on there.
jul 9, 2025, 5:37 am • 0 0 • view
I fed it into chatgpt and it exploded.
jul 9, 2025, 3:31 am • 0 0 • view
Just doing a less comprehensible Dennis Miller impersonation. Only thing missing is the "Now I don't want to get off on a rant here" opening.
jul 9, 2025, 3:36 am • 0 0 • view
My favorite t-shirt says “eschew obfuscation,” and that’s what this article forgot to do…
jul 9, 2025, 3:58 am • 2 0 • view
"my kingdom for a copy editor willing to use corporal punishment to rein me in"
jul 9, 2025, 3:32 am • 6 0 • view
That costs a LOT more than most authors can pay.
jul 9, 2025, 3:38 am • 4 0 • view
The DIY version is reading your work aloud to your cat.
jul 9, 2025, 3:40 am • 3 0 • view
The "read aloud" clue that people keep relying on is probably useless here. I give good odds this is how he talks extemporaneously, since this is how I talk, too. Especially since I don't struggle to understand his meaning at all. But I would never let my random ramble go into print unedited...
jul 9, 2025, 3:59 am • 1 0 • view
I agree it would be largely useless but I think if you read this to your cat you would get clawed because how dare you speak to them like this
jul 9, 2025, 4:03 am • 5 1 • view
It hovers between fascinating and horrifying. Seems like he's been radicalized and blames Obama, Biden, identity politics, wokeness, etc. for his descent into or rediscovery of his biases and blames his students for not going through the exact same experiences he did. #BadlyBroken
jul 9, 2025, 4:14 am • 1 0 • view
I think he's saying Trump got elected partly because racialized people got tired of having to help white people learn about and make efforts to ameliorate systemic racism. At least I hope so, because otherwise it's little more than an erudite fart.
jul 9, 2025, 3:38 am • 0 0 • view
I’d like some of whatever his editor was smoking though. Assuming there was an editor involved?
jul 9, 2025, 3:33 am • 1 0 • view
It's not trying to say anything. It's clearly the output of a generative transformer. Those use randomness as a seed. That leads to lots of adjectives and it resembles writing approaching a point. But GPTs don't understand anything, so they never have a point, they just look like they do.
jul 9, 2025, 7:20 am • 1 0 • view
I believe he's referring to an old, old wooden ship used during the Civil War era
jul 9, 2025, 3:57 am • 0 0 • view
Latinos like Trump even tho he's racist, so the usual Democrat wisdom of "minorities will automatically vote for us" doesn't hold anymore I think it's the gist of what he's saying
jul 9, 2025, 5:24 pm • 1 0 • view
He's trying to do the whole, "Trump is an acceptable response to people correcting me but also I don't like him but he is onto something because one of my students identified as latina but I don't think she really was based on (long fart sound) and really what did we expect?"
jul 9, 2025, 4:16 am • 3 0 • view
It really reads like when you feed something thru a translator app over and over.
jul 9, 2025, 6:34 am • 0 0 • view
It's just color blind nonsense. A desire for things to be a certain way that they simply aren't and a refusal to ground what is likely a liberal worldview in history and socioeconomic reality. Basically, dems acknowledging that some groups have specific and unique concerns is the real racism.
jul 9, 2025, 2:19 pm • 1 0 • view
Yeah that's the impression I got from the esoteric magic incantation that this writer seems to be channeling.
jul 9, 2025, 2:23 pm • 1 0 • view
He probably got AI to do it for him?
jul 9, 2025, 3:41 am • 0 0 • view
I feel this constantly. I've retrained myself to recognize it as my writer brain warning me that the text is actually just disorganized drivel.
jul 9, 2025, 3:39 am • 0 0 • view
A sentence with a double appositive followed by a run on sentence fragment? Truly informative.
jul 9, 2025, 3:45 am • 0 0 • view
The politics around identity have divided our society. Biden tried to speak to the ideal of atoning for our racist past and moving to a more just future. Biden’s clumsy efforts only served to make the divisions more clear to many voters.
jul 9, 2025, 3:44 am • 0 0 • view
Trump spoke to these divisions. Angering White voters with immigration and framing diversity as discrimination. While rallying disaffected Black and Hispanic voters with the perceived failure of decades of policy.
jul 9, 2025, 3:44 am • 0 0 • view
Not exactly what I’d go with, getting each paragraph to fit in 300 characters is tricky. But it’s a little clearer at least. Can already see some more edits now that I posted it. OH WELL.
jul 9, 2025, 3:46 am • 0 0 • view
Yup. Had one of my 1L's turned in this gibberish, it would have earned a big red "X" across the whole damn thing with a "Start over, this time in English" comment up the margin.
jul 9, 2025, 10:52 am • 0 0 • view
I really don't think that understanding whatever's there is in anyone's best interests
jul 9, 2025, 3:31 am • 2 0 • view
That's me trying to write an essay...that's why I pursued a chemistry degree. Couldn't write to save my soul. Give me an equation or formula any time
jul 9, 2025, 1:03 pm • 0 0 • view
Having flashbacks to tutorials where my essay partner was clearly up all night on double-strength Nescafé dosed with scotch.
jul 9, 2025, 3:41 am • 7 0 • view
But yeah, stylistically he’s trying to write around the edges of the thing, but there is no thing.
jul 9, 2025, 3:45 am • 9 0 • view
Of course there's a thing: the tacit assumption that calcified into a conventional wisdom. Plain as the nose on your face!
jul 9, 2025, 4:36 am • 7 0 • view
This is one of those rare instances when using AI is justified
jul 9, 2025, 3:39 am • 1 0 • view
Same.
jul 9, 2025, 3:35 am • 0 0 • view
“Both sides!,” duh
jul 9, 2025, 4:47 pm • 0 0 • view
I just explained to my son that you gotta write like people talk.
jul 9, 2025, 4:35 am • 0 0 • view
"It's Biden's fault because 'Don't be racist' was too complicated for people and yet, paradoxically, too simple for our complex society."
jul 9, 2025, 3:40 am • 0 0 • view
Just write “Antiracist college students are the real racists” and have the sentence be a hyperlink to a Lee Fang tweet
jul 9, 2025, 3:42 am • 10 0 • view
So… are you free to comment on TCW because this is just a guest essay in the NYT? (Genuinely wondering what the parameters of the social media criticism restrictions at NYT are.)
jul 9, 2025, 3:43 am • 2 0 • view
I think he means ignore race? But rewriting history that early Obama years were a time of no racism? um no. While Obama strove to be a unifier & we had a brief moment of hope we didn’t have to be so aware of differences - THE RACISTS STILL CLAIMED HE WAS DIVISIVE. So we learned to face the rot.
jul 9, 2025, 4:31 pm • 0 0 • view
“I am smart”
jul 9, 2025, 4:25 am • 0 0 • view
Someone was writing with a Thesaurus…
jul 9, 2025, 4:30 am • 2 0 • view
P1: I don't like anti-racism P2: what if we stopped with the anti-racism, because it works for Trump
jul 9, 2025, 11:36 pm • 0 0 • view
At this juncture, let’s all say a quiet “thanks” to editors who fall on grenades like this every day.
jul 9, 2025, 4:14 am • 2 0 • view
I thought I was just tired. But no, those paragraphs make no sense.
jul 9, 2025, 3:33 am • 0 0 • view
Is he paid by the syllable?
jul 9, 2025, 3:56 am • 0 0 • view
That's okay. He doesn't know what he's trying to say. There's no fixing muddled thinking.
jul 9, 2025, 3:46 am • 0 0 • view
Trying to win a multisyllabic derby?
jul 9, 2025, 3:49 am • 2 0 • view
Sir, you are disrespecting SAT scores
jul 9, 2025, 3:43 am • 0 0 • view
“Biden lost because of identity politics, and Trump’s appeal to racism and bigotry was even more effective because of that.”
jul 9, 2025, 4:54 am • 0 0 • view
My best guess is that this guy is complaining that some kind of hope for a "colorblind" America that he thought the Obama years would help usher in has been usurped by identity politics, and that Trump used this to convince white voters that they were victims being exploited by minority groups
jul 9, 2025, 5:15 am • 1 0 • view
It seems to me like this dude seems to think that we were on track to solve racism forever after Obama got elected and is mad that it didn't turn out that way
jul 9, 2025, 5:17 am • 4 0 • view
That's one hell of an unappealing and unintelligible word salad.
jul 9, 2025, 3:51 am • 0 0 • view
Whatever the thing is where people use "utilize" where "use" would be better (which is almost always), that's like his entire writing style.
jul 9, 2025, 3:39 am • 1 0 • view
He thinks reaction to the identity politics he sees in his classroom is what brought Trump back to power. His mistake is thinking that his classroom has much to do with America In General. Again, I like the guy. But he holds the conceit that his lived experience is "representative" way too much.
jul 9, 2025, 6:09 am • 0 0 • view
It is a bit of a slog.
jul 9, 2025, 3:45 am • 0 0 • view
This is giving me a compulsion to attempt to diagram these sentences and see if I can glean…anything.
jul 9, 2025, 3:45 am • 0 0 • view
He doesn't either
jul 9, 2025, 4:37 am • 0 0 • view
He doesn’t know either. Half baked is generous
jul 9, 2025, 3:34 am • 1 0 • view
I’ve read and reread this carefully 6 times now, and I cannot, for the life of me, fathom what point or argument the author is trying to construct
jul 9, 2025, 3:40 am • 0 0 • view
I think he fancies himself the next George Will or William F. Buckley. Unlike those men, he can't write.
jul 9, 2025, 4:06 am • 0 0 • view
I can see why a piece that short takes 7 minutes to read lol
jul 9, 2025, 3:53 am • 1 0 • view
I'm trying to figure out how i would diagram these two sentences and I'm coming up short. "Run-on sentence" doesn't begin to describe them.
jul 9, 2025, 5:00 am • 0 0 • view
I *think* it says, “Wokeness is worse than ‘colorblindness’. Trump has used the wedge issue of DEI to reassert white supremacy while somehow also appealing to a cohort of POC.”
jul 9, 2025, 4:03 am • 0 0 • view
If you ask chat got to clarify this, it will break
jul 9, 2025, 5:33 am • 0 0 • view
Chatgpt geez
jul 9, 2025, 5:41 am • 0 0 • view
tl;dr
jul 9, 2025, 3:14 am • 0 0 • view
is this AI attempting to speaking in baroque extrapolations of the subsequent conclusion of society?
jul 9, 2025, 6:47 am • 0 0 • view
Word goulash.
jul 9, 2025, 10:07 am • 0 0 • view
Are they paragraphs or just ramblings with generous over spacing? Was the author short of periods?
jul 9, 2025, 5:46 am • 1 0 • view
This is what happens when you have a thesaurus in one hand, and a bong in the other.
jul 9, 2025, 3:22 am • 3 0 • view
And a word count to hit 😂
jul 9, 2025, 3:56 am • 3 0 • view
@katz.theracket.news I remember writing like that, pulling up a lot of big words & slapping them together - but I was a first-gen 16-year-old trying to sound fancy on my college applications...
jul 9, 2025, 3:42 am • 0 0 • view
Who wrote this tripe?
jul 9, 2025, 4:07 am • 1 0 • view
jul 9, 2025, 4:23 am • 1 0 • view
That’s the most pretentiously made up sounding name. Sounds just like his writing.
jul 9, 2025, 4:45 am • 1 0 • view
it sounds like a name AI would make up
jul 9, 2025, 4:47 am • 1 0 • view
Do professional writers actually not read their columns aloud before submitting them? I was taught that technique in 5th grade. MFers got nothing on my 5 paragraph essay.
jul 9, 2025, 3:21 am • 0 0 • view
Verbose sesquipedalianism.
jul 9, 2025, 9:50 pm • 1 0 • view
Orwellian doublespeak. A lot of words that say essentially nothing.
jul 9, 2025, 3:58 am • 0 0 • view
Word salad with big words and no substance or coherent thought or logic.
jul 9, 2025, 3:55 am • 0 0 • view
please no it hurts us
jul 9, 2025, 3:14 am • 6 0 • view
The uniformity of the sentences (only two) is really striking—no variety at all. Just droning on and on and on.
jul 9, 2025, 12:16 pm • 0 0 • view
Vapid and pedantic. Truly nothing but hot air.
jul 9, 2025, 9:15 pm • 0 0 • view
I've seen run on sentences before, but run on paragraphs? 🤷♀️
jul 9, 2025, 4:45 am • 0 0 • view
I’m a composition prof. It’s awful.
jul 9, 2025, 11:31 am • 1 0 • view
I used to teach elementary school. It’s awful.
jul 9, 2025, 11:39 am • 2 1 • view
Ouf. That’s only two sentences.
jul 9, 2025, 10:19 am • 0 0 • view
there’s density like a diamond and density like a loaf of sourdough that didn’t rise and TCW cannot distinguish between the two
jul 9, 2025, 3:42 am • 0 0 • view
jul 9, 2025, 7:58 pm • 1 0 • view
Even just reading them silently has my internal voice screaming.
jul 9, 2025, 1:13 pm • 0 0 • view
Best writing tip I ever got: Read it out loud before you turn it in. Always works.
jul 9, 2025, 4:00 pm • 1 0 • view
Sounds like the pseudo-intellectualism found on American Thinker.
jul 9, 2025, 4:34 am • 0 0 • view
My attempt to summarize: “Trump enabling racist nazism is Biden’s fault”
jul 9, 2025, 3:14 am • 0 0 • view
tldr: Biden's stance against generic "racism" was too simple to be convincing in a diverse society. In contrast Trump pandered to each demographic individually and that's why he won. Boom. Done. Easy. This writing is bad. It's also wrong. It was the economy, stupid.
jul 9, 2025, 8:54 am • 1 0 • view
I'm able to decode this because I used to be an English teacher, and I worked with adults who have severe cognitive disabilities. When someone is trying desperately hard to express themselves, but can't find the words, you have to meet them halfway. Shouldn't apply to professional writers though 😐
jul 9, 2025, 8:59 am • 3 0 • view
Somewhere there’s a thesaurus feeling used and dirty.
jul 9, 2025, 7:11 pm • 0 0 • view
I had a HS teacher teach this same tactic. We weren't allowed to hand something in until we read it out loud to ourselves first. It's a very easy way to proofread
jul 9, 2025, 3:09 pm • 1 0 • view
There is zero flow, no vibe. I know the overuse of a thesaurus when I (try) to read it.
jul 9, 2025, 1:46 pm • 2 0 • view
Does this guy have a limited budget for periods, or something?
jul 9, 2025, 3:37 am • 1 0 • view
I haven't seen that many commas abused since I was trying to make a 20,000 word target on a topic essay that could be written concisely in 10,000 words.
jul 9, 2025, 3:19 am • 0 0 • view
This prose brought to you by amphetamine salts
jul 9, 2025, 3:16 am • 0 0 • view
Wait, you can get “elevated” to victim and “demoted” to oppressor? So, he feels bad for oppressors? Okay, then.
jul 9, 2025, 3:45 am • 0 0 • view
I feel like Tom wants to show off how well he did in the vocab section of the SAT?
jul 9, 2025, 3:29 am • 0 0 • view
It’s incredible that this author is ignoring the same basic advice that I give to grade 9 students.
jul 9, 2025, 3:14 am • 12 0 • view
"Use complete sentences"?
jul 9, 2025, 3:44 am • 1 0 • view
"Get to the point"?
jul 9, 2025, 3:22 am • 8 0 • view
"Don't use words you don't know the meaning of?"
jul 9, 2025, 3:39 am • 8 0 • view
The great thing about it is that there are at least a half dozen pieces of basic writing advice of the sort you'd give a 9th grader that the piece is violating.
jul 9, 2025, 11:29 am • 2 0 • view
This is a guy who has written *a lot* of bad erotic fanfic
jul 9, 2025, 3:13 am • 18 0 • view
SNORTLAUGH
jul 9, 2025, 3:43 am • 1 0 • view
Must a copywriter for those tech startups where you have no idea what they actually do, but boy does it sound like it is something!
jul 9, 2025, 4:57 pm • 0 0 • view
This is the kind of writing that would earn them a C- on a middle school book report Flowery prose means nothing if it fails to clearly communicate your ideas to the reader
jul 9, 2025, 7:26 am • 0 0 • view
My kingdom for an editor!
jul 9, 2025, 3:13 am • 1 0 • view
A perfect example illustrating the difference between someone who can write and someone who fancies himself a writer.
jul 9, 2025, 3:24 am • 0 0 • view
It took me a good ten minutes to figure out what he was even trying to say, and if you remove the snark, I think it's just "Trump capitalized on what divides us."
jul 9, 2025, 3:44 am • 0 0 • view
D- if I’m being generous.
jul 9, 2025, 3:13 am • 1 0 • view
Word salad is too kind
jul 9, 2025, 3:53 am • 1 0 • view
Word hash, made mostly of tripe & offal.
jul 9, 2025, 3:56 am • 1 0 • view
Did Grok write this?
jul 9, 2025, 8:07 am • 0 0 • view
Completely agree
jul 9, 2025, 10:01 am • 0 0 • view
Writing that will make your monocle fall into your tea.
jul 9, 2025, 4:08 am • 0 0 • view
This feels like word salad that thinks it's filet mignon
jul 9, 2025, 3:46 am • 0 0 • view
Dude can’t see the sentence diagramming forest for the trees
jul 9, 2025, 5:38 am • 0 0 • view
I’m always amused that this blowhard’s name is actually “Chatterton”
jul 9, 2025, 3:14 am • 1 0 • view
Bright student wielding bullshit artistry to camouflage fact essay was written 2 hours ago while hungover
jul 9, 2025, 3:47 am • 12 0 • view
It's like watching an old episode of Firing Line near a gas leak.
jul 9, 2025, 3:16 am • 0 0 • view
When reading aloud feels like running out of breath before you’ve finished chewing the rocks
jul 9, 2025, 2:01 pm • 0 0 • view
Vocabulary should be a tool, not a fashion accessory.
jul 9, 2025, 3:29 pm • 0 0 • view
Those are one-sentence paragraphs. This guy prevents more periods than Elon Musk.
jul 9, 2025, 3:13 am • 0 0 • view
A lot of seven dollar words in there. Mumbledygop.
jul 9, 2025, 3:46 am • 0 0 • view
“Racial relations were bad during Biden and now Trump is exploiting that” like did I miss anything?
jul 9, 2025, 3:18 am • 0 0 • view
The first paragraph/sentence is an absolute disaster, it's just a jumble of words in loosely formed clauses without rhythm or reason. It's like when you read something in a dream, it's all just squiggles.
jul 9, 2025, 3:33 am • 0 0 • view
And they rode on in the friscalating dusklight
jul 9, 2025, 1:27 pm • 26 0 • view
“It was a dark and stormy night” but anti-woke
jul 9, 2025, 2:00 pm • 3 0 • view
😂 “Wildcat.”
jul 9, 2025, 1:53 pm • 1 0 • view
How many buzzwords can I cram into a paragraph… that must have been the challenge!
jul 9, 2025, 3:36 am • 0 0 • view
this gives me a headache.
jul 9, 2025, 3:34 am • 0 0 • view
this is how I answered the sat essay question in 2006 trying to sound smart.
jul 9, 2025, 3:35 am • 0 0 • view
This writing insists upon itself.
jul 9, 2025, 4:06 am • 0 0 • view
Take away their thesaurus. JFC.
jul 9, 2025, 1:41 pm • 0 0 • view
this reads like trying to catch your footing as you fall down the stairs
jul 9, 2025, 4:02 am • 0 0 • view
It's a how many big words can you use in a two paragraph essay assignment.
jul 9, 2025, 11:33 pm • 1 0 • view
He writes like someone who learned new words and is desperate to use them. A liberal arts freshman because engineers would never.
jul 9, 2025, 3:20 am • 0 0 • view
Jesus that was good advice
jul 9, 2025, 3:13 am • 0 0 • view
I read this thinking “a paragraph should have multiple sentences in it, not consist of one long run-on sentence!”
jul 9, 2025, 4:14 am • 0 0 • view
If he’s going to “And” you, I guess I’ll “out loud” him: _Dude, for people who “and” other writers, the word is “aloud”_
jul 9, 2025, 3:34 am • 1 0 • view
Calling them paragraphs is giving them too much credit. These are run on sentences
jul 9, 2025, 3:37 am • 1 0 • view
If that’s how his lectures sound, no wonder the students don’t get what he’s talking about.
jul 9, 2025, 4:34 am • 0 0 • view
Good tip, says a superannuated professor here.
jul 9, 2025, 3:18 am • 0 0 • view
Just because someone knows big words, it doesn’t indicate intelligence. Bros can’t seem to grasp that part.
jul 9, 2025, 4:46 am • 0 0 • view
Like groceries, it’s a very old word that people don’t use anymore. Makes you look erudite when you use it.
jul 9, 2025, 5:03 am • 1 0 • view
speaking of obfuscating more than illuminating lol
jul 9, 2025, 3:12 am • 19 0 • view
😆
jul 9, 2025, 5:57 am • 0 0 • view
If I submitted this trash in my high school journalism class I would have failed.
jul 9, 2025, 11:42 am • 1 0 • view
Who wrote this pseudo intellectual gobbledygook? I imagine some 40 year old incel clown in a dank basement with his thesaurus painstakingly looking for the largest syllable words to get his moron point across.
jul 9, 2025, 4:34 am • 0 0 • view
This has to either be ChatGPT or Curtis Yarvin. Or maybe ChatGPT trained on Yarvin. 🤪
jul 9, 2025, 6:30 am • 0 0 • view
This is what I urge my editing clients to do…
jul 9, 2025, 3:47 am • 1 0 • view
Was there a word count requirement or something? Jesus christ. - an English major
jul 9, 2025, 3:24 am • 0 0 • view
As is, it’s a mess! Maybe ChatGPT can make some sense of it.
jul 9, 2025, 6:13 pm • 1 0 • view
Honestly, it reminds me of grad school papers from people who were clearly struggling to tread water in the course.
jul 9, 2025, 3:11 am • 17 0 • view
Exactly.
jul 9, 2025, 3:13 am • 0 0 • view
i like the parenthetical at the end. just shaking out all the words left in the bag like scrabble tiles
jul 9, 2025, 3:16 am • 166 1 • view
jul 9, 2025, 4:33 am • 2 0 • view
This is a beautiful sentence, Whet
jul 9, 2025, 3:20 am • 30 0 • view
Joshua be like
jul 9, 2025, 4:51 am • 0 0 • view
He can write, that other guy not so much.
jul 9, 2025, 3:25 am • 9 0 • view
this made me laugh out loud
jul 9, 2025, 3:17 am • 4 0 • view
Like he just discovered a thesaurus.
jul 9, 2025, 3:25 am • 0 0 • view
😂
jul 9, 2025, 3:24 am • 0 0 • view
Friends, Romans, countrymen...
jul 9, 2025, 3:29 am • 0 0 • view
Just capitalize 1/3 of the words and put “Thank you for your attention to this matter!”
jul 9, 2025, 3:19 am • 3 0 • view
This is just what invaders, usurpers, and/or recipients of unfair advantages would say
jul 9, 2025, 3:21 am • 0 0 • view
With ten plurals in that one sentence, it does have a rattling, tumbling effect!
jul 9, 2025, 3:23 am • 0 0 • view
Absolutely wild that there are only two periods in that screenshot
jul 9, 2025, 3:13 am • 20 0 • view
Who wrote this?
jul 9, 2025, 5:24 am • 0 0 • view
Who wrote this? Cornell West?
jul 9, 2025, 4:06 am • 0 0 • view
It’s about a columnist in love with the sound of their own voice
jul 9, 2025, 3:37 am • 1 0 • view
I am so reassured I am not the only one who was baffled by this effort. The writer feels so strongly about something, but it is hard to tell what exactly that may be.
jul 9, 2025, 4:48 am • 1 0 • view
The writing is so bad I know it's gotta be TCBY treats.
jul 9, 2025, 3:25 am • 0 0 • view
Make it so dumb they won’t try to read so compressing it into 60sec is digestible. (My brains emotions)
jul 9, 2025, 10:26 pm • 0 0 • view
I get it, it took a second. I also think they're kinda right but it's written like a freshman trying to make a name for themselves in the gen Ed's.
jul 9, 2025, 4:30 am • 0 0 • view
At first I thought "who wrote this??" and then I opened up the original thread and said "oh, of course it was him"
jul 9, 2025, 3:13 am • 7 0 • view
Oh yeah, I guess if I had a name like this I'd make myself everyone else's problem too
jul 9, 2025, 3:24 am • 2 0 • view
With a name like that, I'm expecting a monocle.
jul 9, 2025, 3:31 am • 1 0 • view
Me, reading the name "Thomas Chatterton Williams"
jul 9, 2025, 3:31 am • 8 0 • view
Ugh, even his name is unnecessarily wordy
jul 9, 2025, 3:40 am • 1 0 • view
Honestly, this reads like some of the ChatGPT essays I’ve read.
jul 9, 2025, 4:40 am • 0 0 • view
Huh? 💩
jul 9, 2025, 12:46 pm • 0 0 • view
🤯
jul 9, 2025, 3:47 am • 0 0 • view
It hurts!
jul 9, 2025, 3:51 am • 0 0 • view
Tried twice, only words I remember are "obfuscated" and "incoherently".
jul 9, 2025, 3:28 am • 0 0 • view
I never once thought that this would have been posted again, but here we are. 🤷🏼♀️
![My Bluesky post from July 7, 2025 that reads: [*clippy enters chat*]](https://cdn.bsky.app/img/feed_thumbnail/plain/did:plc:mdldrnno3b7b4rhupgyoywng/bafkreidhbca5gnb2zjtlfgvuwwbqgmcuzczukiooahfguaetnyvmteqjke@jpeg)
jul 9, 2025, 3:19 am • 1 0 • view
A Thesaurus was at hand, but it the author is so interested in being "deep" that it makes no sense.
jul 9, 2025, 7:24 am • 0 0 • view
jul 9, 2025, 4:31 am • 0 0 • view
I'm pile on and say it would probably be a kindness to slap him with a second hand copy of The Elements of Style.
jul 9, 2025, 4:31 am • 0 0 • view
Did someone's teacher set a high word limit for their essay? "Manifold." Indeed. Verily.
jul 9, 2025, 3:16 am • 0 0 • view
I made it to, “incoherently wooing”
jul 9, 2025, 7:30 pm • 0 0 • view
The best writers can take complex thoughts and write them so eloquently that it practically reads as conversation. This reads like an AI article with the slider set to undergrad. The words are there, the structure is there, but anyone who enjoys reading or writing had zero part in crafting it
jul 9, 2025, 3:16 am • 5 0 • view
I'd argue the structure is not there, but some words definitely are
jul 9, 2025, 3:51 am • 0 0 • view
It's not good but there is structure, by which I mean there are sentences and paragraphs. Like a cheap facade, it has all of the appearance but none of the substance.
jul 9, 2025, 4:03 am • 0 0 • view
the actual thing "obfuscating more than illuminating" here is the quoted passage
jul 9, 2025, 3:19 am • 1 0 • view
That'll give ya a seizure. F*ck me.
jul 9, 2025, 3:23 am • 0 0 • view
When Chatterbox says he has "students," one gets filled with the urge to find some way to let them know they would absolutely be much better writers and thinkers just by fooling with Deepseek or Claude for a month. He's a cartoon character with a well-thumbed thesaurus, and no point.
jul 9, 2025, 3:58 am • 0 0 • view
this sounds like a rapper's bar that has too many words so they try to run them together and it sounds sloppy as they try to keep the beat
jul 9, 2025, 3:34 am • 0 0 • view
A.I. ?
jul 9, 2025, 3:21 am • 1 0 • view
Reminds me of students who copy and paste something from the internet or ChatGPT based on a few key words. My favorite is when I have to help them pronounce words they supposedly wrote!
jul 9, 2025, 3:35 am • 0 0 • view
jul 9, 2025, 3:14 am • 0 0 • view
That's an explosion in a thesaurus warehouse. So many big fancy words, to cover up the incoherence of what's being said.
jul 9, 2025, 6:48 am • 0 0 • view
who wrote this?
jul 9, 2025, 3:37 am • 0 0 • view
really bad first sentence. can’t read any further.
jul 9, 2025, 3:15 am • 0 0 • view
It’s not great, but it’s entirely coherent and comprehensible. But I read a lot of philosophy, and getting through verbose writers as diverse as Augustine, Hegel, and Butler makes stuff like this easy.
jul 9, 2025, 6:04 am • 1 0 • view
Philosophers are notorious for being some of the worst writers there are, though...
jul 9, 2025, 11:34 am • 0 0 • view
AI - spew me some big intellectually sounding words.
jul 9, 2025, 5:24 am • 0 0 • view
Word salad.
jul 9, 2025, 9:45 am • 12 0 • view
I’ve read it three times now and still don’t know what the hell it’s saying.
jul 9, 2025, 12:58 pm • 1 0 • view
It's the paragraph-long sentences for me
jul 9, 2025, 7:36 am • 0 0 • view
Those are certainly all words in those TWO SENTENCES!
jul 9, 2025, 9:46 am • 1 0 • view
This reads like it was written by my mother-in-law who wrote academic papers by thinking in her native Swedish, translating in her head to the French she spoke in high school, and then translating again to English.
jul 9, 2025, 3:19 am • 0 0 • view
Those aren't paragraphs. Those are two very long run-on sentences separated by a couple of carriage returns.
jul 9, 2025, 3:15 am • 2 0 • view
Somehow seems to rationalize or celebrate Trumpism. Odd.
jul 9, 2025, 3:34 am • 0 0 • view
I'll give him this, he seems like an expert on things that obfuscate far more than they illuminate
jul 9, 2025, 3:46 am • 1 0 • view
Waxing exuberant --> waxing poetic
jul 9, 2025, 3:26 am • 0 0 • view
The blahblahblah of blahblahblah has replaced the idea of blahblahblah with this other blahblahblah. When will Americans wake up to the blahblahblah idea of blahblahblah? Why don't we all just embrace blahblahblah and keep doing blahblahblah?
jul 9, 2025, 4:16 am • 0 0 • view
Someone please tell me what it was that calcified (the politics? The ethos? The era?). My family is dying
jul 9, 2025, 3:48 am • 6 0 • view
I guess identity politics. It was meant as something unifying in the early Obama days and it turned to be something dividing, because ethnicities are not ignored. Typical DEI is intended to be good but it’s bad. Therefore, Trump is appealing.
jul 9, 2025, 5:06 am • 1 0 • view
My family is dying 😆👏
jul 9, 2025, 5:59 am • 1 0 • view
I woke up to this piece of 'writing' atop my feed, and my day has been a struggle ever since. Protip: start your day with news in French from Le Monde and thank me later.
jul 9, 2025, 8:34 am • 0 0 • view
You sadist.
jul 9, 2025, 3:23 am • 0 0 • view
To be fair, contra some of the other commenters, the lack of context in the first paragraph is what makes it unintelligible. Both paragraphs are showy, purple prose and hard to read, but the second one does mean something—under Trump it’s Opposite Day.
jul 9, 2025, 10:00 am • 0 0 • view
That's probably the point. Pseudo-intellectual, flowery mumbo-jumbo, designed to sound high-class and present himself as intelligent to the uninitiated. TCW is probably very proud of his "literary genius" and doesn't actually understand what garbage this is.
jul 9, 2025, 4:14 am • 0 0 • view
I mean. I have a fairly extensive vocabulary, but when I write I generally make some effing sense! That’s just a mess.
jul 9, 2025, 3:13 am • 0 0 • view
those are just two long segments of text, each of which tries but fails to be a complete sentence. they do not merit being described as 'paragraphs' imo
jul 9, 2025, 3:41 am • 0 0 • view
Is this AI generated?
jul 9, 2025, 5:20 pm • 0 0 • view
I first thought someone had hit "go" on the Deepak Chopra quote generator, but that site is sadly defunct. AI mush, combined with an exploding thesaurus is my guess
jul 9, 2025, 3:38 am • 0 0 • view
7 minutes to read, a lifetime to understand...
jul 9, 2025, 3:46 am • 0 0 • view
Just me, probably, but I understand the desire not to drive traffic to dumb publications. At the same time, I don't automatically know what the source is, and feel like it would be handy to know. (If it's the NYT or Atlantic, as it often is, you can just say that.)
jul 9, 2025, 3:21 am • 0 0 • view
As with other badly written published articles recently, where are the editors? Do they not review these opinion pieces (of crap)?
jul 9, 2025, 9:16 am • 0 0 • view
Its like AI trained on Jordan Peterson speak but on politics not society.
jul 9, 2025, 4:27 pm • 0 0 • view
expressing a complicated clear thought as plainly as you can vs. camouflaging half-baked insights with SAT words and digression.
jul 9, 2025, 3:32 am • 0 0 • view
Trump won because woke “went too far”… or something about plumbing leaks. Unsure 🤷🏻♂️
jul 9, 2025, 11:24 am • 0 0 • view
It looks to me like they were built up haphazardly. But the gist seems to be a claim that Biden oversaw some objectively intensified age of liberal identity politics. I think that's not true, but that the fantasy realms of Fox, et al. treated the assertion as true. It's an old "conservative" saw.
jul 9, 2025, 9:23 am • 0 0 • view
I see way more dash use since ChatGPT came out.
jul 9, 2025, 3:18 am • 0 0 • view
no, jamelle. i refuse to read these out loud.
jul 9, 2025, 11:30 am • 1 0 • view
Not sure the read-it-out-loud trick works for AI, and it would be very surprising if that is not a pile of AI slop.
jul 9, 2025, 9:26 am • 1 0 • view
I tried to read that 1st graph out loud and wondered if the author was in the midst of a stroke while writing it.
jul 9, 2025, 4:13 am • 0 0 • view
youtu.be/hKAZg5S_XgU?...
jul 9, 2025, 3:34 am • 0 0 • view
Turgid.
jul 9, 2025, 3:14 am • 0 0 • view
I couldn’t get past the first sentence.
jul 9, 2025, 3:11 am • 6 0 • view
i have really great and/or terrible news: it's one sentence per paragraph.
jul 9, 2025, 3:12 am • 18 0 • view
Yeah I kept going and thought WTF?
jul 9, 2025, 3:13 am • 2 0 • view
Doesn't "struggle to maintain the thought" imply that thought went into this? Not seeing much evidence of that.
jul 9, 2025, 3:18 am • 0 0 • view
It’s not even two real paragraphs! It’s just two obese sentences.
jul 9, 2025, 3:21 am • 0 0 • view
He did write an actual book titled, "losing my cool," so it's possible what he meant was, "losing my ability to communicate effectively."
jul 9, 2025, 3:20 am • 0 0 • view
All I’ll say is, I knew it was TCW before I checked the beginning of the thread. He certainly has an individual style!
jul 9, 2025, 9:04 am • 0 0 • view
It looks like somebody jammed AI results through an AI a couple times until they ended up with total nonsense
jul 9, 2025, 2:34 pm • 0 0 • view
So much word salad.
jul 9, 2025, 4:51 am • 0 0 • view
Did they give ChatGPT a prompt along the lines of “write two paragraphs making it seem like I have disappeared up my own asshole?”
jul 9, 2025, 7:36 am • 1 0 • view
Good god. Those aren't two paragraphs. Those are two run-on sentences.
jul 9, 2025, 5:25 am • 0 0 • view
IT BURNSSSS
jul 9, 2025, 3:12 am • 3 0 • view
I have lost several brain cells
jul 9, 2025, 3:13 am • 1 0 • view
I smell a Thesaurus. 😏
jul 9, 2025, 1:35 pm • 0 0 • view
Oh, a TACIT assumption. My favorite kind!
jul 9, 2025, 3:22 am • 98 0 • view
Me personally, I prefer all my cultures to be pre-existing
jul 9, 2025, 3:33 am • 0 0 • view
Still stuck on the engine manifold failure.
jul 9, 2025, 1:39 pm • 0 0 • view
I’m still uncertain if this is all an AI generated joke or not. “Chatterton”? Really? I don’t believe that’s real…
jul 9, 2025, 3:35 am • 0 0 • view
They're extra assumption-y.
jul 9, 2025, 3:27 am • 13 0 • view
actual lol. I did read it out loud, and that was something between an anti-breathing exercise and exactly what @jamellebouie.net described
jul 9, 2025, 3:34 am • 5 0 • view
AI
jul 9, 2025, 5:36 am • 0 0 • view
"invaders, usurpers, recipients from the ice cream truck at the start of the ice cream man's run when the truck was fully stocked"
jul 9, 2025, 3:24 am • 0 0 • view
I kNoW bIg WoRdS That’s how that reads
jul 9, 2025, 2:26 pm • 2 0 • view
If your paragraph has more than one sentence in it, you lose
jul 9, 2025, 5:06 am • 0 0 • view
AI generated?
jul 9, 2025, 3:15 am • 0 0 • view
jul 9, 2025, 12:17 pm • 0 0 • view
Our guy probably did read this aloud, and thought it was brilliant 😭
jul 9, 2025, 3:25 am • 0 0 • view
My early grad school writing likely read like this. Suuuuper cringe. Trying to use every big word you know
jul 9, 2025, 3:38 pm • 2 0 • view
Is it a chatbot?
jul 9, 2025, 3:20 pm • 0 0 • view
The first paragraph of the passage is a fragment designed to plant false premises in your mind as valid for which to proceed to a bigger argument. It's practically impossible to engage with both facets of the lie at the same time because of text limits and because bad faith shits on valid critique.
jul 9, 2025, 11:24 pm • 0 0 • view
I tend to write sentences like this, but that's what first drafts are for.
jul 9, 2025, 3:47 am • 0 0 • view
He’s a big fan of Stunk & The Whites, “Elements of Guile.”
jul 9, 2025, 3:48 am • 1 0 • view
this reads like it was compiled in response to a bizarre editorial mandate for a both-sides narrative scripted in the register of Henry James
jul 9, 2025, 4:22 am • 0 0 • view
Are we allowed to take a breath midway through those two marathon-length sentences?
jul 9, 2025, 4:59 pm • 0 0 • view
Did Katz write this
jul 9, 2025, 3:36 am • 0 0 • view
Looks like they learned some big words and were just dying to use them.
jul 9, 2025, 3:24 am • 3 0 • view
Agree. You might even say it obfuscates far more than it hopes to illuminate.
jul 9, 2025, 12:58 pm • 0 0 • view
victor hugo would tell this guy to break up his sentences with full stops
jul 9, 2025, 3:33 am • 0 0 • view
Translation - "A few months ago I had to press one for Ingles and I am still mad about it."
jul 9, 2025, 4:47 am • 3 0 • view
This is the writing of someone who THINKS they love language, but they really just love their own voice. Also, someone who hasn't been required to clearly communicate anything important for a very long time.
jul 9, 2025, 3:13 am • 66 0 • view
Or at least the sound of their own voice as it sounds in their head - I'd throttle myself before being that garrulous
jul 9, 2025, 3:21 am • 4 0 • view
This is the writing of ai I'm pretty sure. It has all the hallmarks.
jul 9, 2025, 3:40 am • 4 0 • view
The one credit I will give most AIs is that they tend to get to the point - even if the point is completely wrong or made up.
jul 9, 2025, 3:42 am • 7 0 • view
A lot of it, yes, but I've seen a fair amount that does ... whatever the heck this is
jul 9, 2025, 3:45 am • 3 0 • view
Big, fancy words thrown together to sound smart. Somewhere a thesaurus is crying.
jul 9, 2025, 3:53 am • 9 0 • view
Thomas Yapperton Williams
jul 9, 2025, 6:47 pm • 1 0 • view
I was going to type, “Who wrote this garbage? Thomas Chatterton Williams?” And then I thought, “That’s kinda mean.” And then I checked! And no fucking way! The man has an identifiable style of writing, that’s for sure.
jul 9, 2025, 3:25 am • 1 0 • view
Sounds like someone trying way too hard on their college essay
jul 9, 2025, 4:31 am • 0 0 • view
Paragraphs? Each of these is a single sentence.
jul 9, 2025, 3:49 am • 0 0 • view
This is a fantastic example of an argument that will never reach its intended audience regardless of its merit. Sometimes trying to be the smartest person in the room is a bad way to be persuasive.
jul 9, 2025, 3:56 pm • 0 0 • view
It reads like ChatGPT. All those thudding syllables.
jul 9, 2025, 3:13 am • 10 0 • view
Yeah to me too. Given slightly strange parameters like "use big words" but yeah.
jul 9, 2025, 3:41 am • 1 0 • view
No, I think even Chat is more to the point.
jul 9, 2025, 3:22 am • 2 0 • view
That's only two sentences. Ha ha ha.
jul 9, 2025, 3:13 am • 4 0 • view
I’m saying that’s genAI. The runon sentences and inability to comprehend the rhythm of language give it away.
jul 9, 2025, 3:21 am • 2 0 • view